Searching For A Former Clarity (721 hits)
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Submitted by HighVoltage900 (View user info) at 2006-10-25 21:02:07 EDT
After 10 years of inactivity Justin had finally had enough. He hadn't indulged any of his whims since he got married and it was finally pushing him over the edge. Waking up every day to that woman, bless her heart, was going to kill him. Sure he loved his wife, but if he couldn't let out his baser tendencies he would just lose it! That feeling in his chest of all his emotions just bottling up within him was driving him mad and causing him to feel so much anxiety he couldn't even think.
He told his wife he wouldn't be home from work that night on account of an overnight conference and rented a hotel room on the seedy outskirts of the city. The hotel, a dingy place called "Piedmont Inn" was one that Justin knew from a previous life. He rented a room and put his overnight bag in the tiny closet allotted to the room. Going back outside to the parking lot he heard the sounds of gunfire in the distance and sirens going off but paid it no mind. They were just atmospheric sounds of no consequence and made no difference to him getting in his car and driving off.
As his car rumbled down a dark street he felt his heart begin to burst with excitement. Finally he would rid himself of this weight he had been carrying! Finally he would be able to think clearly! Finally he could just relax!
The side streets were riddled with the worst off of society and as he pulled up to a traffic light a woman clad in very little came slinking out of a dark alleyway and approached his car.
"Hey darling." He said as he rolled down his window.
"Hey to yourself big boy." She said leaning up against the car showing Justin her cleavage. She wasn't in her prime, probably a decade or so past but one can't be picky at times like these. Her skin was pale and matted with sweat, her eyes bugging out from a particularly nice score of crack and her body was slightly spilling out of the skimpy outfit that might have fit her 5 years and 15 pounds ago.
"What's your name?" Justin asked putting the car into park.
"Bunny."
"Well Bunny my name is Justin and I've been having a bad time I need some release."
"I think I can help you with that if you can help me with cigarette money. You know packs have increased to $100 a pack." She said licking her lips and smudging her already running lipstick. Justin pulled a few twenties out of his pocket and showed it to her with a grin, his heart pounding with excitement.
Bunny gave her breasts a little shake of delight and opened the sedan's door and got into the passengers seat. Justin pushed the car back into drive and began driving off with his new companion.
"So what do you do for a living daddy?" She asked.
"I work at the Piedmont Chronicle, I write articles about local crimes."
"Oh a big time reporter! How exciting." She said in a husky tone meant to attract him, though he was hardly listening to her. Instead his mind was in the hotel room already having fun.
"So Justin are you married?"
"Yup. Two kids. Sometimes I can't stand it." He replied.
"I can help you forget." Bunny offered and Justin smiled politely at her.
"I expect you to."
"Are we going to your house?"
"No. I have a hotel room nearby if that's okay."
"Whatever you like, I'm here for your pleasure."
"I know and I'm going to use you for it." Justin said blankly. Women! Why must they insist on talking? Can't this whore just shut up until they got back to the hotel room?
"Do you live out here?" Bunny asked after a short time of silence.
"Look I'm really stressed out, can we not talk until we get back to the hotel room?" Justin asked politely yet firmly. Bunny's smile flickered and then she went back to starring out the window at the passing lights for the rest of the trip.
When they arrived back at the hotel Justin led Bunny to his room, allowing her inside before him and shutting the door firmly in his wake.
"Oh that bed looks really comfortable!" Bunny said as she walked over to the bed in a way that showed Justin her the curve of her ass and the backs of her legs. Justin just blinked.
"It is comfortable." He said following her to the bed and sitting down beside her. She curled up to his lap, running her hand up her chest as Justin stuffed his hand into his pocket displaying signs of nervousness.
"You ready to have fun?" She asked into his ear and Justin made up his mind. With a smile he said "Yes" and pulled the stun gun out of his pocket. Shoving it up against Bunny's revealed midriff and pressing the main button on the device, Bunny's body began to spasm and she fell unconscious to the bedside and then to the floor.
Justin bent down and picked her up, depositing her unceremoniously back onto the bed. His wife and kids could never know about this, which is why for 10 years of marriage he had resisted and resisted but finally could take no more. He had to have his release. He needed that clarity he used to have.
Going to the closet Justin took out his overnight bag and emptied the contents onto the bed next to Bunny's sleeping form. An electric skillet, a hack saw, a pair of eating utensils, and some throw-away towels were the contents and Justin picked the skillet out of them and plugged it in.
Turning the skillet temperature to 'High' Justin sat back and thought.
After 10 years of inactivity, it was finally his time again.
The Piedmont Cannibal, so aptly named by local authorities after his murderous spree 11 years ago was finally going have a nice night. And while he waited for the electric skillet to heat up, he thought about what article he would write about himself in the morning.
User Reviews
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-10-27 10:28:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-10-26 23:07:44 (#)
Ranking: 2
You did a good job with this. I agree your writing would be tighter and more enjoyable with good editing/proofreading. I've always told you that though. Now do it.
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*sigh* Yeah you're always pushing that proofreading thing on me. I could call it writer's flair that I don't, but seriously this was just a weird piece. I had NO IDEA what was going to happen until I got to the end. I had a slight notion and a sentence I really wanted to use but other than that nothing.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-10-26 23:07:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You did a good job with this. I agree your writing would be tighter and more enjoyable with good editing/proofreading. I've always told you that though. Now do it.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-10-26 23:02:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-10-26 22:45:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn you to hell. This was engrossing and very well developed. You relayed everything you had to without taking up a lot of time or space, and did it pretty much effortlessly.
For some reason the line "Don't just look at it. Eat it." from American Psycho flashed through my mind when he was talking to Bunny.
Submitted by nahnoneofit (user info) at 2006-10-26 15:07:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 for against me
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-10-26 15:01:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
shoulda hit it first
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-10-26 12:37:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-10-26 09:08:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice twist.
Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2006-10-26 02:49:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by jfreakman (user info) at 2006-10-26 00:37:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice, dude.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-10-25 23:59:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by freebie (user info) at 2006-10-25 23:42:42 (#)
Ranking: 0
Had potential then you lost it in being overdescriptive and the mispelllingwas really cool
when bunny was past er prime and he got all Jason on her ass.....
Fair material but you need an editor
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Point out mispellings.
Submitted by freebie (user info) at 2006-10-25 23:42:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Had potential then you lost it in being overdescriptive and the mispelllingwas really cool
when bunny was past er prime and he got all Jason on her ass.....
Fair material but you need an editor
Submitted by Allyson (user info) at 2006-10-25 23:05:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2NAMI!!!!!!!!!!
Submitted by Antioxident (user info) at 2006-10-25 22:54:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2006-10-25 22:30:32 (#)
Ranking: 2
auto +2 against me! album title reference.
now i'll go read the post
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I'm gald I'm not the only one who thought of AM! when they saw the title
Submitted by Susie_Derkins (user info) at 2006-10-25 22:40:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Not your best writing, but you got me with the unexpected twist at the end. Have a toffee.
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2006-10-25 22:30:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
auto +2 against me! album title reference.
now i'll go read the post
Submitted by Antioxident (user info) at 2006-10-25 21:51:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fucking awesome
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-10-25 21:27:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Bunny Bunny bo bani banana bana fo fanny, be by bo bunny, bunny....
Submitted by UnderOathMeal (user info) at 2006-10-25 21:08:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Loved it.