The War of All Wars. (Pt. 3) (269 hits)
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Submitted by http://www.nowthatshumor.com (View user info) at 2006-11-16 11:26:10 EST
The War of All Wars. (Pt. 1) - http://www.ubersite.com/m/95667
The War of All Wars. (Pt. 2) - http://www.ubersite.com/m/95700
The commander and I walk into the enemies bunker we have just taken. He explains to me this base we are attempting to capture is vital to winning the war. The base has been a main supply depot for there outer most defenses. Taking this base would critically damage their re-supplying efforts. He goes on to explain how we must take control of this base and the entire sector as a number one priority for our division. Failure is not an option at this point. Our own defenses and bases have been under major attack in the past few weeks, all sides are starting to break down, and the real question is which army will break first.
I've just been told my special mission, I'm to take 5 other soldiers and sneak our way over 50 yards through heavily defending enemy territory and disable a generator. In my mind this is a definite death sentence, how do they expect 6 soldiers to make it past an entire front line defense. As good solider, I keep my gripes to myself. I head out to the trenches to pick my five men, once I've chosen who shall join me in death we'll gear up and head towards the reaper.
I've got my men geared up and ready to roll. I try to show courage as I explain the mission to them, but my eyes cannot lie. They know this mission will mostly likely send them to their graves, if we are even lucky to get a grave. A small river runs along the entire sector, we'll attempt to stealthy swim along it and hopefully past most their major defenses. As we slow wade through the river, a machine gun nest spots us. Machine gun fire rips through the main group of us, 3 soldiers are down. The other to run towards shore, I yell for them not to do this, but it is too late. Seconds after they hit the banks they both meet a gator mine. There isn't much left of them after this.
I hit the water, motionless and lifeless, hoping the enemy will think they hit me with machine gun fire. I slow submerse myself and slow swim underwater past there machine gun nest. The weight added to my cloths is immense, I feel like I'm swimming with over 200lbs on me. I surface a few yards down from the nest, luckily they didn't see me and figured I'm fish food. I hit the banks slowly, watching for gator mines and other traps. I realize that I'm only a few yards from the generator.
Looking at the defenses I realize I'll never make it over there. I sit down behind some brush for a minute and think, what can I do. I cannot go back without completing the mission, nor will I survive trying to complete it. The smell around me is horrible; I notice tons of dead enemy combatants all around my area. An idea fizzles in my mind.
I grab one of the rotten corpses near me and begin to under dress him, I figure I'll put on his uniform and attempt something dangerous and insane. I'll attempt to walk right past their defenses and not even have to fire a single shot. I just hope the defenders speak English or I'll be up shits creek without a paddle. I get full dressed, the smell coming of these cloths is something awful, and you've never smelled horror till you've smelled a rotting corpse. I look up and wait for the fewest defenders to be around before I proceed.
I begin to struggle out of the bushes, looking weak and hurt. They point over to me from one of the machine gun nests. Two enemies run over to me rifles drawn, but when they get closers they scream for a medic, luckily in English. I tell them I'm fine, that I'm what is left of the defenders of the front lines they just lost. They looked shocked, knowing our major assault left no prisoners or survivors. They walk me over to one of the barracks and tell me to wait there as they go and get there commander. This is my opportunity, I head over to the generator, realizing I left all my demolition gear at the banks I must think of something fast.
To the right of me is a container of sodium loride a deadly chemical they put in their 88mm shells and use to wreak havoc on us. I take the 5 gallon container and dump almost all of it into the gas tank and the rest in the oil in take. Seconds later the generator begins to break down, lights flicker all over there base and defense network. I begin to rush towards the banks; all of a sudden I go black.
I awaken tied down in some bunker, the enemy is all around me, their commander enters the room.
User Reviews
Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2006-11-16 16:35:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Stop making so many god damn typos - as others have said the story is good.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-11-16 14:54:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2006-11-16 13:33:04 (#)
Ranking: 1
You know I'm really itching just to make fun of you and tell you to learn English and shit motherfucker! But I can't, because I like these series.
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yeah, me too.
So, SO many typos.
I GOT IT! This story is a flashback, and the soldier telling it took shrapnel in the head which effected his brain so that he can't spell and has no sense of grammar.
What do I win?
Submitted by Sandecki (user info) at 2006-11-16 13:41:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2006-11-16 13:33:04 (#)
Ranking: 1
You know I'm really itching just to make fun of you and tell you to learn English and shit motherfucker! But I can't, because I like these series.
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Ya, It is pretty bad, I'm working on it! *slaps self with large trout*
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2006-11-16 13:33:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
You know I'm really itching just to make fun of you and tell you to learn English and shit motherfucker! But I can't, because I like these series.
Submitted by Sandecki (user info) at 2006-11-16 12:04:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:59:15 (#)
Ranking: 1
What he said. 1 or 2 mistakes again and you needed a few commas. WAY better.
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Thanks, I always like the feedback, don't hesitate to point out the mistakes, I'd like to know.
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:59:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
What he said. 1 or 2 mistakes again and you needed a few commas. WAY better.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:38:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Sandecki (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:34:39 (#)
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Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:30:56 (#)
Ranking: 1
Definite improvements in terms of spelling, though it seems a little rushed in getting to the capture. Still a good read.
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There is a "very" good reason why it was so quick, you'll see in part 4. I didn't want to drag out as much in this one and I did in the past 2.
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Fair enough, I look forward to it. Oh, the sentences in the first paragraph seemed very, very clunky, didn't read too well.
Submitted by Sandecki (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:34:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:30:56 (#)
Ranking: 1
Definite improvements in terms of spelling, though it seems a little rushed in getting to the capture. Still a good read.
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There is a "very" good reason why it was so quick, you'll see in part 4. I didn't want to drag out as much in this one and I did in the past 2.
Submitted by HurtByTheSun (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:30:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Definite improvements in terms of spelling, though it seems a little rushed in getting to the capture. Still a good read.
Submitted by Sandecki (user info) at 2006-11-16 11:27:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Well, with all the comments and suggestions from others I present my 3 part of this story. I did it in word and proof read quite a few times. I'm sure I missed some mistakes, but I'd love for you to put them out and let me know how the story is progressing. Thanks.