From the Willows (401 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 0.77 on 11 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by PayMeLater (View user info) at 2006-12-07 16:39:54 EST
From the willows there
I can see the stream
Casting back the glare
Of a hoary dream
Laughing willows there
O're the valley low
Once without a care
Once with all to show
Sturdy willows there
Clambered as a child
Higher on a dare
Over valley wild
Watchful willows here
Where a young boy flees
Vigilantes near
Daddy on his knees
Stoic willows then
As my father swore
Hoisted by the men
Soon to fight no more
From the willows here
They hung up our lives
Sundered by the years
Decades I despised
From the willows now
At last my father's son
Broken from the bough
Now their work is done
User Reviews
Submitted by orphelia (user info) at 2008-06-19 13:14:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I am only here to nosey who you might be but poetry? Bonus!
There is something very Seamus Heaney about this.
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2006-12-08 08:51:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Great ! Now insert this even into your own life .
Submitted by CHR15 (user info) at 2006-12-08 08:31:08 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Poetry needs to be very good to be worth reading and this, well, wasn't.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-12-08 01:35:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-12-07 17:56:44 (#)
Ranking: 2
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The first two lines of the fifth stanza don't have the flow of the rest of the piece.
All in all, I liked it...
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Make that the final stanza. Sorry.
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2006-12-07 20:20:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by erosion_rules (user info) at 2006-12-07 17:59:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Heh... He's HUNG. Get it? 'Cause he's hanging from the tree? And like, he's all dead and stuff?
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-12-07 17:56:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm going to +2 this for the meaning and content. There are a few technical things
that need repaired: 'hoary' has a silent h and, as such, should be preceded with
'an'. Someone else mentioned 'o'er'.
The first two lines of the fifth stanza don't have the flow of the rest of the piece.
All in all, I liked it...
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-12-07 17:24:12 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
i can smell...
crap..
o'er here.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-12-07 16:52:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2006-12-07 16:51:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Good.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-12-07 16:45:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
over is transliterated as "o'er", btw