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Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: -0.7 on 21 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by BrittInToledo (View user info) at 2006-12-11 14:30:16 EST
I tried to button my black coat.
I couldn't do it without a
Grown-up.
Today the sun was
Not shining.
I shivered and looked at all the
Big people.
They were quiet,
Like at naptime,
And their heads were down,
Looking at the ground,
Listening to a man in a black gown.
Mommy squeezed my hand.
I looked up into her eyes.
She shook her head.
I felt a raindrop.
The man stopped talking.
People began walking.
One,
Two,
Three,
Five, no,
Four,
And then so many people went away
I couldn't count them anymore.
But me, Mommy, and Daddy were
Still here.
Mommy whispered into Daddy's ear and
Walked back to the big, shiny car.
I asked Daddy
"Why is everyone so quiet?"
He wiped his eyes and
Leaned down.
Another raindrop.
Daddy said softly,
"They are sad because your sister went
To Heaven."
"With Jesus?"
Daddy smiled a little smile and
Wiped his cheek.
Three raindrops.
"Yes, Samantha."
"When is she coming back?
Missy has to come home and
Play dress-up with me and
Sing songs to me."
"No, honey. Missy isn't coming
Home."
Then Daddy started
Crying
Really hard
Like Missy did in the hospital.
She was so sick.
She threw up a lot.
And then she had no more hair.
It all fell out.
"I want Missy back!"
I screamed.
Then I started
Crying.
"No, Sam."
Daddy picked me up
And we walked back to the
Ugly,
Black car.
And then it started to rain.
And we left Missy.
User Reviews
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-12-12 05:29:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
arent you the guy who eats arbys?
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-12-12 03:57:17 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This isn't a poem, it's a defacation of the memory it's supposed to honor.
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2006-12-12 00:21:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Not bad.
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2006-12-11 22:12:25 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Typos are very important to all written form. It gives the reader something to look for so they aren't distracted by the total lack of content in your writing.
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2006-12-11 18:45:20 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
...Shut the ufck up, you ignorant, retarded, inbreed cunt.
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> hic! <
Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2006-12-11 18:37:07 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2006-12-11 18:23:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sinistral (user info) at 2006-12-11 17:39:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
ARGH
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2006-12-11 17:14:44 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:51:34 (#)
Ranking: -2
Then Missy spread
Her legs
Far apart
Like some kind of leg-goatse
The doctor came in
He took off his clothes
And raped that fucking bitch until she
Died a painful death
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Shut the ufck up, you ignorant, retarded, inbreed cunt.
That goes for BOTH of you.
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:51:34 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Then Missy spread
Her legs
Far apart
Like some kind of leg-goatse
The doctor came in
He took off his clothes
And raped that fucking bitch until she
Died a painful death
Submitted by Razor (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:50:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Well, I liked it even if nobody else did.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:43:56 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
off the front page
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:43:48 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Then Daddy started
Crying
Really hard
Like Missy did in the hospital.
She was so sick.
She threw up a lot.
And then she had no more hair.
It all fell out.
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hahhahahaa
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:37:44 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I'm sorry, this was just far too cheesey for my taste.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:29:05 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
You picked the wrong site, buddy.
Didn't read.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-12-11 15:19:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
for thinking that this is a serious writers forum
Submitted by ubetidid (user info) at 2006-12-11 14:56:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hmmph.
well, fuck me, but I kind of liked this.
Submitted by ih8u2man (user info) at 2006-12-11 14:44:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
"My dick that is."
Submitted by ih8u2man (user info) at 2006-12-11 14:43:48 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
"Why is everyone so quiet?"
He wiped his eyes and
Leaned down.
Another raindrop.
Daddy said softly,
"They are sad because your post smells like
shit like when I pull it out of your mom's ass."
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2006-12-11 14:37:10 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-12-11 14:35:55 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
wrong site