What your kiss says about you. (728 hits)
Category: Quotes & StoriesRating: -1.09 on 11 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Ais (View user info) at 2007-01-05 09:59:56 EST
A piece of blah the bloke and I wrote, hence the two narrative voices. Sometimes I'm so nauseatingly in love I make myself sick, as well as everyone else. Probably the kindest thing to do would be shot me. In the meantime, sorry.
What Your Kiss Says About You
She's touching me. I'm trying not to fall over. She's kissing me. I'm closing the eye closest to her, and focusing on the floor. If I close the other eye the room is going to spin, and I'll vomit in her mouth. That'll really impress the girl. Why didn't this happen half an hour ago, instead of now when I feel like I'm about to piss myself?
Touching the rough stubble on the side of his face. Stroking his jaw line with my finger tips. Breathing in the sticky sour whiskey on his breath, the slightly stale tobacco smell that lingers in his hair. We lean forwards, heart to heart. The music around us stops and everyone vanishes. Mouth to mouth. We kiss and the moment seems to last forever.
The first sober kiss. Adapting to each others' style. Meeting properly for the first time. Finding just the right time for that first sober kiss. The one that defines the relationship. The decision maker. The whole time spent together leads up to this point until it is inevitable, looming over everything we do. It has to happen or the whole evening has been a waste of time. Maybe I should have spent it on the sofa with a cup of tea and the television for company? Instead, I'm here with some girl I barely know, just wondering. Adrenaline and nerves flow through the body, hands start to shake and you will then to stop and heads get closer and closer together to the rhythm of 'oh shit, oh shit, oh shit' which goes around and around your head. Then there's nothing. Everything seems to stop, no thoughts flow and nothing else matters. If the world ended then you wouldn't notice and seconds pass like hours. The stupid distance you've traveled and the handfuls of cash you've spent don't matter; this makes up for everything.
It's a cold night and all I can hear is the waves of the ocean. Our heads tilt. This seems to perfect to be real. His head goes to the right; mine to the left and our noses knock together before our lips can meet. I can't help noticing the sand in my shoes, as we laugh awkwardly and try again. This time we get it right, and everything's perfect. Everything's going to be perfect. He's soft and kind and cares. We fall down in the cold, wet sand and fall into another kiss.
Each kiss is different. Different meaning, different intent and different results. The only thing that stays the same is the happiness that passes in the touch of mouth on mouth. Each kiss is like a whisper in your ear, telling you something new about your love.
User Reviews
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2007-01-05 12:15:11 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:03:58 (#)
Ranking: 0
hi there.
this was not good.
have a nice day.
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My advice; go buy a strap-on and bend him over the kitchen table.
Submitted by ripple (user info) at 2007-01-05 11:57:55 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Each kiss is different. Different meaning, different intent and different results. The only thing that stays the same is the happiness that passes in the touch of mouth on mouth. Each kiss is like a whisper in your ear, telling you something new about your love.
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worst. ending. ever.
i actually think the descriptions couldve been nice if youd managed to give them a plot.
self-deprication here doesnt make people go easier on you, just fyi.
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2007-01-05 11:06:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Why don't you kiss the business end of a .45?
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:57:06 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Gil Hicks: Definitely a jackhammer. I'm in there with some pressure and when I'm done, you're not the same as before. You're changed.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:44:32 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
God this sucked.
Evolve.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:28:17 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:17:28 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
He thinks about your sister when he's fucking you
Submitted by Timmaaaaah (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:14:27 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Blimey, and i thought i did a fucking gay post.
Ive learnt my lesson, go forth my heathen friend and prosper.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:06:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
A piece of blah the bloke and I wrote, hence the two narrative voices. Sometimes I'm so nauseatingly in love I make myself sick, as well as everyone else. Probably the kindest thing to do would be shot me. In the meantime, sorry.
What Your Kiss Says About You
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only got this far then threw up a little bit on my mouse.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:04:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
His second paragraph reminds me of the first time I kissed a girl. The girls after that didnt give the same sensation I just dove in there like I hadn't eaten for a week.
I have yet to kiss a man, and secretly hope not too although I know how old fashioned that is these days, so I can't relate to your paragraphs.
Nice though, I need a kiss now.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-01-05 10:03:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
hi there.
this was not good.
have a nice day.