Paradise Is Not Enough (447 hits)
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Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2007-01-05 15:11:24 EST
For a 550 word contest on another site, titles provided...
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Garteze slipped through the Thin into the darker epicenter. Here, where it was always night, fires burned in cans that lined the filthy streets, illuminating the industrial towers the pumped a thick, acrid smoke into the sky above. Would that a sun existed here, it probably would not be able to penetrate the black smog that hung in the upper levels, the fumes akin to that of smoldering rubber. No one was even entirely sure what these obscene factories manufactured, but undoubtedly something horrific.
The street level was where the most wretched sought residence, and Garteze quickly found stairs that lead up to one of the many steel catwalks that criss-crossed this black land. As he walked through the chaos of the citizens, he was offered all manner of pleasures. He could have flesh, substances, gambling, battle, or things not found outside of this realm. No matter the vice, it was available for a small fee; at first, of course.
Further down, Garteze found an elevator. It was guarded by two large beings who silently demanded his identification. Once he had made his qualifications clear, these individuals still showed indifference, but allowed him passage. Garteze considered the ramifications of this as he rode the open air carriage up high to a penthouse.
As he climbed out of the elevator, he was once again troubled by the sight before him. Ivy hung loosely around a door frame, small bones intertwined throughout its leaves. Not so much a welcoming vision for one like who lived here. Garteze knocked and was shortly greeted by a tall, pale bald man.
"Garteze, I'm glad you could make it!" exclaimed his host.
"Thank you for the invitation, Xerxes," replied Garteze.
Garteze entered the large apartment, astounded by the decor. It was dark, what some would have called "gothic." In small alcoves, items sat under tiny lamps like showcases. When Garteze leaned in to inspect one, he was shocked.
"Is that what I..."
"It is indeed," replied Xerxes.
"How did you come to have possession of such a thing?" whispered Garteze in amazement.
"They don't care anymore, old friend," said Xerxes. "Nothing matters to them, certainly not the past."
Garteze took these words with hurt, but strolled silently to the large bay windows that overlooked the madness below. He surveyed the atrocities and debauchery beneath him, the sin that was committed in abundance.
"Why here, Xerxes? Of all places, why this nightmarish realm?"
Xerxes smiled. "But Garteze, it is the most holy of dimensions."
"What? The Father would have nothing to do with this, this... incorrect place."
"Garteze, this is the original Divine Land of Man," said Xerxes, trying to hold back a laugh.
Garteze spun in anger. "How can you..."
"My dear old friend," said the Fallen Angel to the other, "These are the remains of Eden."
Shocked by his brother's proclamation, Garteze turned to stare back out the window. He pressed his palms against the glass and tears began to well up. He could not conceive of such a desecration.
"That such a thing would come to pass," whispered Garteze.
"Sometimes, for some," said Xerxes quietly, with sympathy for his friend, "paradise is not enough."
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Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2007-01-09 04:23:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Get back to the Uber-Wars series.
Submitted by NecroBlanca1 (user info) at 2007-01-06 20:25:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Charlton_H (user info) at 2007-01-05 23:01:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by ripple (user info) at 2007-01-05 19:16:26 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
i really did not like this
sorry, i just found it totally unappealing.
Submitted by Charlton_H (user info) at 2007-01-05 19:01:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Fag below.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2007-01-05 18:22:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by dexpaxas (user info) at 2007-01-05 15:43:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I love biblical fiction.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-01-05 15:42:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good.
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2007-01-05 15:23:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-01-05 15:12:53 (#)
Ranking: 2
titles provided?
come on, you provided the titles. YOU.
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Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-01-05 15:23:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
~~~The World is Not Enough...~~~
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2007-01-05 15:17:23 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Yes, but even YOU liked the titles this time around...
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-01-05 15:12:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
titles provided?
come on, you provided the titles. YOU.