Buried Secret (756 hits)
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Submitted by GodChicken <Monty> (View user info) at 2007-01-29 13:27:04 EST
When I was 23, I killed a woman.
I strangled her.
I didn't do it because she made me mad, I didn't do it because I did something and wanted her silenced.
I did it because I wanted to watch someone die.
Awake and aware of what was happening to them, not asleep and draining away, like my grandmother. I wanted to see it happen in her eyes. I can still see her. I can still see the brightness of her eyes, full of animal panic and fear, going dull. Recognition and thought fading like a candle burning down to the last faint light, before drowning in a sea of wax.
That's what she looked like, after. Wax. A dull, pasty doll.
There was no guilt. This was science, to me. A personal experimentation. There was something I didn't know about, though. Something I didn't think about. When you deal with Death, Death marks you. You are drawn back to it, over and over.
I buried her in a old barn, way out on a dirt road. I always liked to go there anyway, hear the birds whistling and calling in the swampy creek just down from that barn. But I've been called back there, over and over, by the secret under the barn.
I unburied her just to see what was left, a few times. Once only a about a year afterwards. I puked on her rotting face, from the smell. I covered it up and went away. I couldn't stay away for long, though. I had to walk around there. I had to make sure the dirt covering her wasn't disturbed. I had to make sure nobody had come along and found her. Sometimes, though, I'd uncover her. Something about staring into the empty sockets of her skull fascinated me. I'd brush the dirt from them.
"You're alive," it seemed to say,"and I'm not." it accused.
"This is your fault!" it would whisper, and I'd talk back.
I'd explain why, and how interesting it was to see her from the inside-out. I'll be with her again someday, and I'll apologize. I'll tell her about the fear. Her fear. Marking me, staining me. Bringing me back to her when she calls.
It's been 10 years, and someone has bought the property. They'll probably knock my old barn down.
They'll dig up my secret, and the questions will start to fly. I'm afraid. Afraid that my buried secret is going to reach back up from the grave to get me, a bony finger pointing out its living twin. Deal with Death, and Death marks you. One living, one dead. One buried secret.
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Submitted by JohnnyTruant (user info) at 2007-02-01 23:48:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-02-01 23:37:01 EST (#)
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So um..anout that time I mentioned I'd like to know more about you..
Yep. Still do.
Submitted by mynameisandy (user info) at 2007-01-30 22:15:17 EST (#)
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Short, but interesting and nicely written.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-01-30 16:33:42 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-01-30 14:07:44 EST (#)
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Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2007-01-30 11:55:10 EST (#)
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ok
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-01-30 11:41:11 EST (#)
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Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:34:58 (#)
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Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:32:56 (#)
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I didn't realize it was based on a dream...
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Yep. Check my other "Dreams" post. Sometimes I wonder if I really am a closet basketcase.
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HA!
"Closet" basketcase.
GodChicken? "Closet" means nobody knows it.
We're all well-aware.
;)
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-01-30 11:40:03 EST (#)
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TRUE STORY
Submitted by jade_digitalmedia (user info) at 2007-01-30 10:44:53 EST (#)
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find something under that new place of yours monty?
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2007-01-29 23:17:04 EST (#)
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I dream about being a viking.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2007-01-29 19:01:02 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by i_can_get_you_a_toe (user info) at 2007-01-29 17:51:41 EST (#)
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Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:02:51 (#)
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I killed a man in reno, just to watch him die
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That line popped into my head as well.
Now i've got Johnny Cash stuck in my head.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-01-29 17:17:04 EST (#)
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when i killed that one chick i ate her so i wouldn't have to bury anything.
she was delicious.
Submitted by JulsInsane (user info) at 2007-01-29 16:55:44 EST (#)
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Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-01-29 16:35:05 (#)
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Submitted by Hilarity_Ensues (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:54:31 (#)
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Thanks for giving me the idea of where to bury my new boyfriend :)
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NEVER trust a woman who says this sort of stuff.... even in jest.
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Never trust a woman.
Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2007-01-29 16:40:42 EST (#)
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Burying bodies is for suckers.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-01-29 16:35:05 EST (#)
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Submitted by Hilarity_Ensues (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:54:31 (#)
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Thanks for giving me the idea of where to bury my new boyfriend :)
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NEVER trust a woman who says this sort of stuff.... even in jest.
Submitted by forthewin (user info) at 2007-01-29 15:40:17 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Newty (user info) at 2007-01-29 15:20:37 EST (#)
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*shudder* very creepy
Submitted by ubetidid (user info) at 2007-01-29 15:20:00 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Hilarity_Ensues (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:54:31 EST (#)
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Thanks for giving me the idea of where to bury my new boyfriend :)
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:54:18 EST (#)
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I choked my chicken.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:42:51 EST (#)
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stop being a creepy old fuck.
Submitted by DirtyHarry (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:40:36 EST (#)
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psycho
Submitted by sweetcheebs (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:39:58 EST (#)
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Sweet
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:39:02 EST (#)
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There is other decent stuff on Uber today.
This is my favorite bar far... might actually have to try and get back into something serious myself.
Submitted by LittleMonster (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:04:39 EST (#)
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Fuck that. Fuck it the arse..........this is going to keep me awake. I wish you hadn't told me it was a dream, it would have had me going for days.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:02:51 EST (#)
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I killed a man in reno, just to watch him die.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-01-29 14:01:39 EST (#)
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bad marine, no donut
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:58:05 EST (#)
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Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:34:58 (#)
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Yep. Check my other "Dreams" post. Sometimes I wonder if I really am a closet basketcase.
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I believe that the basketcase idea is 100% correct. I have my reasons.
-Dave
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:51:29 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:50:23 EST (#)
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I KNEW IT
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:44:16 EST (#)
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STAMP OF APPROVAL.
Submitted by Kracka (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:43:03 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:41:38 EST (#)
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I do believe I just spilled a diamond sundae all over my Nikes.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:40:07 EST (#)
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Stop playing around the fishtank with your matchbox cars?
Submitted by moneyshotforyou (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:40:01 EST (#)
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There are medications that you should be on.
Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:37:53 EST (#)
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I've had some of the most fucked up dreams you can imagine. I scrawled the details of many but I'm not a very good writer and I'm particularly bad with dreams partly because I'm just not that good of a writer and partly because the dreams are so bizarre they're just hard to put into coherent words....
Here's an example: driving down the highway with my friends and wreck due to dead fish on the road... i also notice there are live fish out of water but sort of swimming/flopping up shoulder. Then I end up at a party worrying about the insurance payout on my totaled car and another friend is making a midget porno movie in the middle of the party...
What say you to that one?
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:34:58 (#)
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Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:32:56 (#)
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I didn't realize it was based on a dream...
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Yep. Check my other "Dreams" post. Sometimes I wonder if I really am a closet basketcase.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:36:18 EST (#)
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Dreams like that stay with you, man. You wake up just happy to be away from wherever it was that you were dreaming.
Especially when they happen over and over again. You'd think that you'd get a clue when you were dreaming, but it never happens. Every time is the first time.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:34:58 EST (#)
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Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:32:56 (#)
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I didn't realize it was based on a dream...
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Yep. Check my other "Dreams" post. Sometimes I wonder if I really am a closet basketcase.
Submitted by lechuza (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:33:30 EST (#)
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nice
Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:32:56 EST (#)
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I didn't realize it was based on a dream...
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:27:40 (#)
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Fucking recurring nightmares.
Thanks for the inspiration, bastard subconcious.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:32:15 EST (#)
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I have had dreams like that.
Submitted by homer42 (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:31:58 EST (#)
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good but too short i think.
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:31:45 EST (#)
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I grew up in a house with a barn just like that. And packed earth floors.
The only thing we ever dug up was old pennies from the 1800s though. Digging is hard fucking work.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:31:31 EST (#)
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Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:29:44 (#)
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I hate dreams where I kill someone.
It's not the killing that bothers me. I'm always scared that I'm going to be caught. Then spend the next 30 years getting fucked. I'm too pretty for jail.
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Exactly. This one was real enough that I woke up expecting to get caught at anytime.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:29:44 EST (#)
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I hate dreams where I kill someone.
It's not the killing that bothers me. I'm always scared that I'm going to be caught. Then spend the next 30 years getting fucked. I'm too pretty for jail.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2007-01-29 13:27:40 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Fucking recurring nightmares.
Thanks for the inspiration, bastard subconcious.