Ubertines '07: Into the Dark, Pt.1 (654 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: 1.42 on 20 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Amontillado (View user info) at 2007-02-05 23:38:15 EST
In the many decades, as far back as he remembered, he'd been fighting them. The creatures from his dreams had been destroying his nights with eerie visions and ethereal voices. Distant howls made him wake up in cold sweats and his weary face was deeply lined from years of worry and insomnia.
He would often wander through the forest behind his New England home, which he had inherited from a long line of eccentric relatives. It had been built in a gothic style with large blocks of stone, menacing gargoyles, a vast library, and dusty secret passages that only the spiders knew. The woods he had learned intimately and he would often leave his flashlight off, using the bone white moon's thin rays to guide him. He seldom used his own path, preferring to follow those that shadowed beasts had worn. He often heard the animals lurking about behind bushes and firs but they had never bothered him and he saw no reason to ever carry a gun.
His soul seemed to be born from the lonely wilderness in which he was surrounded. Sometimes he idly wondered if this had been the way his ancestors had lived- if they too had been plagued by the night. They had all died in solitude, the way he had been for so long. He had many a time tried to live in the city but the forlorn wild had drawn him back. Any women he had met in his younger days were scared away by witnessing the ferocity of his night terrors and he'd finally given up finding a soul mate.
Occasionally the howls he heard in his sleep he couldn't place- some were created by his mind he was sure, some from the wolves and panthers in the forest, however, some seemed to radiate from the walls themselves as if they held spirits in their midst that were eager to merge the boundary between conscious and subconscious. Even more disturbing, if that was possible, was that once in a long while as if one spirit was more bold than the rest, the howls were accompanied by slow, deliberate steps whose sound would echo so that when he sprang up from his bed he looked but couldn't determine their origin until one evening when he dozed off in the library and suddenly something massive and coarse seized him by the neck.
User Reviews
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2007-10-02 18:07:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
huh, neat little piece.
Submitted by bob (user info) at 2007-05-24 16:54:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/108561
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-03-01 19:38:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Just for being nice. I like nice. I missed this when it was posted.
Submitted by St_Jimmy (user info) at 2007-03-01 12:16:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I would read part 2.
Submitted by Unabonger (user info) at 2007-02-06 20:44:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
1.5
Submitted by Unabonger (user info) at 2007-02-06 20:44:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-02-06 20:33:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
But what you did write, was very good.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2007-02-06 20:33:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Like last round, I think this has a lot of potential. But in this case, instead of seeming rushed, it seems like you wrote what you wrote to completion, and then stopped where I wanted to read more.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2007-02-06 19:51:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-02-06 17:37:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
But still good.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2007-02-06 17:36:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Longer please.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-02-06 11:30:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2007-02-06 10:53:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
There could have been more to this.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2007-02-06 07:50:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Teen Wolf rocks.
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-02-06 01:33:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2007-02-06 00:57:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Short, sweet
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2007-02-06 00:09:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nah, he doesn't need a name unless someone's going to be calling him by it.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-02-06 00:06:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Nope, the love part is more towards the forest than any person... though I could create a woman. What did you think about his not having a name? I couldn't think of one that suited him, and didn't really think he needed one.
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2007-02-06 00:00:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
It was Rosie O'Donnell, wasn't it...
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2007-02-05 23:39:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
http://www.ubersite.com/m/98252