Alice Part I (347 hits)
Category: NoneLabels: Alice
Rating: 0.44 on 17 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Beano (View user info) at 2007-03-08 11:07:31 EST
There stood a house atop a sun-kissed hill,
Where gentle breeze from tree to tree did sing,
Where birds whistled their mordent, then their trill,
And rode warm thermals on a feathery wing.
The leafy foliage wrapped around the eaves,
Embracing stone and windows, wood and door;
In every season colour from the leaves
Gave to the house's beauty beauty more.
And on that hill there stood a maiden fair,
Framed in the doorway of mahogany;
Soft smile wreathed her face and flowers her hair;
Her figure was a blessed sight to see.
Her heart was worth more than all the abode,
And in the night her graceful visage glowed.
Part II Tomorrow.
User Reviews
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2008-07-26 12:36:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
OH NOES MY RATINGS!
Submitted by maf54 (user info) at 2008-05-14 05:19:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Just to counter what that idiot Director did to you.
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2008-05-13 17:31:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-03-12 04:47:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by ballsonurchin (user info) at 2007-03-11 23:25:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
DIE.
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Oh dear... not original.
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH BRANDON...... BWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
Submitted by ballsonurchin (user info) at 2007-03-11 23:25:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
DIE.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2007-03-11 21:41:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-03-09 03:02:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-03-08 21:29:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This is poetry, yet, oddly, I like it.
Maybe it's 'cause it rhymes and shit.
There once was a fellow named Beano.
The Flintstone's pet was named Dino.
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You amaze me every day!
Submitted by lungfish (user info) at 2007-03-08 21:29:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This is poetry, yet, oddly, I like it.
Maybe it's 'cause it rhymes and shit.
There once was a fellow named Beano.
The Flintstone's pet was named Dino.
Submitted by messmind (user info) at 2007-03-08 17:25:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-03-08 12:58:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by DesolateMisanthrope (user info) at 2007-03-08 12:39:02 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
does partII include your imminent death? otherwise I aint reading it.
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Yes. yes it does.
Ha!
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-03-08 12:58:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by DesolateMisanthrope (user info) at 2007-03-08 12:39:02 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
does partII include your imminent death? otherwise I aint reading it.
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Yes. yes it does.
Submitted by DesolateMisanthrope (user info) at 2007-03-08 12:39:02 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
does partII include your imminent death? otherwise I aint reading it.
Submitted by Zebra (user info) at 2007-03-08 12:33:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:27:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:24:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:17:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Go mouth your dildo
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Don't do this; it sucks.
I shall await part 2 to brighten my Friday. Woohooo Friday tomorrow thank fuck!
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:27:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Formatting sucks buckets.
Submitted by rorrim (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:24:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:17:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Go mouth your dildo.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:17:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Go dildo your mouth.
Submitted by The_Drake (user info) at 2007-03-08 11:16:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Roses are red.
Violets are blue.
I didn't really get it,
but heres a zero because it wasn't really stand out-ish, but at the same time it wasn't bad either so I'm stuck in the middle of wanting to give you a +2 in hopes that it will get better, and wanting to give you a -2 for sheer "not getting it-ness". Here's a zero for you.
P.S. Cool pic.