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Submitted by mossimo1213 (View user info) at 2007-03-13 18:37:43 EDT
"As I write this letter, my time is up. I've ran and I've hid. My walls are caving in. There is nothing that can be done to stop what is going on. I can only wonder what I would do with a second chance. My family is dead, my friends are dead, and they even killed my damn dog. I played their game and I lost. I hope someone finds out what happened to me. Learn from my mistakes. Be happy with what you have. My entire life has been erased by them. The executioner is calling."-Paul Molina, Aug. 2006
Three months earlier
Paul briskly trotted down the stairs of his office building. He started taking the stairs last week when his 6 year old daughter made fun of his developing gut. Paul used to hit the gym on a regular basis. The stacks of paper at work had been piling up, and he just didn't have time to work out anymore. Just like every other person trying to climb the corporate ladder, his family and social life has struggled.
"Shit!" Paul missed the last step and almost crashed to the floor. Even though he was getting out of shape, he still had some of his college athleticism, and caught himself. It was five o'clock and Paul wanted to get the hell out of there. His wife nagged him about family dinners, their kids and about all the other things at home. Paul made it home very night that week for quality family time, and wasn't about to mess tonight up.
Paul squeezed his thick frame through the revolving door. His football build wasn't flowing well with the rush out the door. He always got dirty looks from all the pencil necks at the end of the day.
Things on the home front were dull as usual. Paul's wife, Katrina, was a decent cook, but nothing extraordinary. Most of her food was under or over cooked, bland or over-powering. She could never seem to strike the happy medium. Being the determined perfectionist that she was, she keep trying and trying, and Paul kept telling her she was getting better, when everything was the same.
The kids were happy to see him home. They were great. Jade and Jon. Jon, who was two wasn't old enough yet to realize how much Daddy had been gone. Jade, who was 6, and a little worry wart. She always pestered Katrina about where Paul was. Paul loved all the big hugs and the "DADDY DADDY!" shrieks whenever he came home.
That night, Paul sat on the couch watching T.V. on mute. It was a habit he picked up since things at work had gotten more stressful. It gave Paul something to look at, but still let him think. Paul looked around at his nice, but average house. He saw pictures of his nice, but average family. Every where he looked, he was average. Paul spaced out and attempted to come up with something wrong in his life. Yea his job was tough, but nothing he couldn't handle. Good job, great kids, loving wife, and now he was even thinking about getting a dog. He had everything, but still felt like there was something missing.
Nothing was wrong with his life, but sometimes, "wrong" is exciting.
To be continued...
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Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-03-14 17:40:39 EDT (#)
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Don't you want to elaborate on my comment?
Submitted by mossimo1213 (user info) at 2007-03-14 16:57:38 EDT (#)
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I think I'm gonna use St. Jimmy's suggestion.
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2007-03-14 14:21:09 EDT (#)
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Submitted by St_Jimmy (user info) at 2007-03-14 10:20:50 EDT (#)
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This has potential. As for a title, how about "The Trouble with Ordinary"
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2007-03-14 07:35:36 EDT (#)
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I see you retrieved your account. Good for you.
Submitted by particle_man58 (user info) at 2007-03-14 04:23:20 EDT (#)
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Go so far. Here's a title for ya "Average Problems".
Submitted by mossimo1213 (user info) at 2007-03-13 19:19:45 EDT (#)
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fair enough grownasskid
Submitted by Grownasskid (user info) at 2007-03-13 19:06:42 EDT (#)
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I want to see the next part before I make any judgements. But next time, name your child.
Submitted by MidnightToSix (user info) at 2007-03-13 18:55:36 EDT (#)
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i like the part where the boy learned to love again
Submitted by tiaprae (user info) at 2007-03-13 18:53:49 EDT (#)
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/99668
Ah I hadn't seen that.
Submitted by DesolateMisanthrope (user info) at 2007-03-13 18:51:57 EDT (#)
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I am asking in the name of goodness. If you can't see it that way you can suck my dick
Submitted by tiaprae (user info) at 2007-03-13 18:49:07 EDT (#)
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I can't wait to read the next part.
Also:
Submitted by DesolateMisanthrope (user info) at 2007-03-13 18:38:55 EDT (#)
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could you drop a good rating on my last post. Bart would appreciate it.
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Come again?
Submitted by DesolateMisanthrope (user info) at 2007-03-13 18:38:55 EDT (#)
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could you drop a good rating on my last post. Bart would appreciate it.